Suffocated

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George watches as the boys in the Royal Artillery Barracks stand to attention. He has always believed it was the war that changed his father. He returned, at the very least, with a limp and he would rap his walking stick on the wooden floor of his study and bellow โ€˜Noise!โ€™ if he was being disturbed.

George was banned from the study, and only once did he break the rule while his father was at the University. The musty smell of old books suffocated the room and the curtains were always drawn, hiding the view of the garden through the rose bush that grew unchecked outside. The shelves, stacked high with thousands of books, lecture papers and periodicals, towered over him as he wiped dust from those that no longer contained an acceptable version of history. On the desk sat what was left of the parcel his mother was holding when she was hit by the car. Inside, a stack of newspaper headlines about his father. Awards won, lectures given, theories explained. There was also a photo, of a man smiling at the camera as he stood next to another man lying on the ground. He looked asleep, or dead.

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OK, I’m going to have to have a change of plan, because things are happening with Tales from the Top Deck that I had not anticipated. This story is beginning to fully form in my mind, with potential, I think, for a novel. Characters and backstory are developing very quickly inside my head and it feels like it could be something along the linesย ofย The Unlikely Pilgrimage of Harold Fry. So, for that reason, I’m going to stop with this line of flash fiction for this month because I feel I need to start outlining properly (while also working on The Last of Logan). I know a few of you have been enjoying George’s adventures, but hopefully this will lead to something more substantial. Tomorrow, I don’t know what yet, but something completely different on the flash fiction front!

13 responses to “Suffocated”

  1. Bring back George and the buses soon !

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    1. He will return in a more fully-formed story, I hope ๐Ÿ™‚

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  2. I love the second sentence.

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    1. Thank you monkey ๐Ÿ™‚

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  3. inkbiotic

    Sounds like exciting things are afoot! Good luck with the plotting ๐Ÿ™‚

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    1. Thank you!

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  4. Mandie Hines

    I enjoyed this line “he wiped dust from those that no longer contained an acceptable version of history,” because it hits on something so true, that the telling of history is always changing. It’s so frustrating too, because if we do not learn from our past we are doomed to repeat it. But who can keep track when we’re constantly rewriting it?
    Of course, this line is immediately followed by one of immense intrigue, his mother’s parcel. So many questions produced with a single line.

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    1. Thank you for reading Mandie and taking the time to comment. I’m glad it struck a chord. There’s also a sense that previous generations are judged by modern standards, which I always think is unfair. As for the parcel, it’s what sparked me into thinking this could be something bigger. Thanks again ๐Ÿ™‚

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  5. Mandie Hines

    You’re correct about the judgment of previous generations, and older generations judge newer generations based on old standards, so it goes both ways. It’s a timely observation too as I’ve been watching the different generations tear each other apart on social media. Some of it’s quite amusing, but in the end the comparisons are flawed.
    Lots of intrigue in this flash fiction piece, and I see it’s not the first time you’ve written about this character, so I think you’re right in taking the time to develop this into something larger. I’ll have to come back and check out some of the other flash fiction pieces with George.

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  6. Nice job, Ben! “The musty smell of old books suffocated the room…”

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    1. Thank you ๐Ÿ™‚

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  7. A wise choice I think.

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    1. Thanks friend ๐Ÿ™‚

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