Reciprocity

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She smiles apologetically when they meet in the communal hallway each morning.
‘Sorry about the noise,’ she’d said when they first met, her son lurking behind a haircut in the doorway. ‘It’s my thing.’
Her thing, is vacuuming her flat at 6am. Every day. He lies in bed, staring at the ceiling. She’s careful at least, never hits the skirting boards.
One day, she vacuums at 5am and a black car takes her away. Later, there are visitors and whispered eulogies seep through the floorboards.

She doesn’t wake him with the vacuum anymore and when they meet, he smiles apologetically.

4 responses to “Reciprocity”

  1. This is very effecting. You’ve done a great job of creating a layered story. There is much more going on than purely the actions that are described.

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    1. Thank you so much! I love the challenge of generating as much meaning as possible from as few words as possible. Comments like this make my day 🙂

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  2. Great story.
    Have you considered trying writing to a competition prompt? On Fridays there’s Microcosms Fiction and on Saturdays there’s Cracked Flash Fiction Competition – both are free to enter and there’s a great flash fiction community to join ranks with. It’s a good way to showcase your work where other writers (and a couple of readers) can find it and then click through to your blog (be sure to add your twitter handle/blog URL along with your name, word count and story title at the top of your story). Happy writing 🙂

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    1. Thank you! I hadn’t got around to looking at the competitions – the usual mental block exposing your writing to that criticism I suppose – but I will definitely do it now. Thanks again 🙂

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